Confessions of a Not-So-Careful Proofreader

I appreciate the feedback. Your comments actually didn't really surprise me. I think I already knew that I make plenty of small mistakes (that I should not even be making at this point in my life). However it might stem from that fact that I never had a teacher who took the time to teach the class about grammar. Well... I can't remember ever having a teacher who did that. I spent a great amount of time trying to fix it and I hope it looks better. I think I probably need to edit my writing pieces more thoroughly and take my time with them. I admit that I don't look too closely at the structure of my sentences these days.